Hi~ anyone can help me out with this essay?
Hi.. anyone remember me? well.. i guess u don't.. it's been a long time since i came back here... I came here today with two purposes... first one is to specially thanks to those who helped me out last year.. Sir Ronbee..and others.. Ronbee helped me the most.. well.. thanks to him... i got an A2 for my 1119 GCE-level test... :)
ok.. my another purpose.. can anyone here just look through my essay and if there's any error or u can gimme a better sentence pls change it...thanks..
THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF TELEVISION
Since the very first television was invented, our world has leaped a big step across technology. Decades ago, telelvision has always been one of the favourite entertainment among families. Throughout these years, the essentiality of television is undeniably true. However, the pros and cons of it are not to be neglected.
As the saying "laughter is the best medicine" suggest, some television programmes such as comedies and cartoons can make us burst into laughter and eventually unwinding us from the stress of gruelling workloads. Moreover, we can widen our knowledge by watching documentary programmes suck as National Geografic, imagine how amusing it is when faraway places being brought into our living rooms, exposing us to the beauty of mother nature, cultures of different races.
Sometimes, we can even catch the latest events going on around the world on television via satelite such as CNN and so forth. That way, it's impossible we can be outdated from the recent news. Of course, seeing is believing, therefore people usually prefer televisions to newspapers as it's more realistic and visual. Television too, can keep us at home rather than loafing around outside wasting time or indulging in vice activities.
Besides that, television is also useful to many companies to advertise their products to people. On the other hand, television can also helps a lot in our critical thinking so that we can look things in different views and perspectives.
Although it can be seen that television benefits everyone immensely, it's flaw too are inevitable. Long hours of watching or not sitting at the adequate distance can result in permanent eye damage. Television programmes such as dramas can be a form of addiction. Most of the people has the habit of serving junk food while watching television programmes, this will only lead to obesity.
Besides, children tend to be so obssesed to some television programmes that they can't even concentrate on their homeworks.This way, they tend to waste more time and have to burn the midnight oil, thus causing fragility the ne\xt morning. This is an adverse circulation of life.
At times, there will be some unhealthy activities in television programmesthat are not meant for teenagers such as gangsterlism, sexuality, all these will affect teenagers' behaviours as they tend to mimic the bad aspects shown in the television. As the consequences, some audacious teenagers are prone to indulge in crimes, thus increasing crime rates in our country.
One other point is, some products advertised on television may be misleading, thus causing consumers to buy things that are not even worth the price.
All in all, bla bla bla.. ( i cant think of an ending... :) )
So... anyone has a better suggestion in changing any sentences in here and welcomed.