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Hello
Can anyone check the below paragraph for the mistakes if there are.

By the way; to the sky that is always on our head,to the darkness times of the day,to the storms that even come up sometimes,to the seas where we would drown one day,to the old times,to the future even if we don’t know what would happen,to the history even if it has many wrongs,to all the beautiful children that are trying to make the flow of the history good,to the Donkisot,to the Ernesto “Ç´e" Guevara,to the ways,to the journeys,to the darlings,to the lovemakings,to the impossibilities of which we can only dream,to the warmings while feeling cold,to the mothers that are warmer than everything,to the fathers,and we are sending our own warmth to the songs that take their tastes from these.
We saw bad things.Wars,massacres,children that were died or killed.We saw people,socities which had lost their own languages,cultures and themselves.We saw flaming villages,cities,forests,animals.We saw poors,crying mothers,fathers and children that knowingly running to their deaths everyday.We died too but despite everything,we sang songs on this earth’s surface.Thanks World.

By the way- strange opening as it's got nothing before it.
sky- I'd say over/above our heads
darkness times- darkest?
to the sea where we *will*
make the flow of the history good,- I'd use 'the course of history'
warmth to the songs- in??
We saw bad things.Wars,massacres, -I'd use a colon after things
saw poors- poor
knowingly running- were knowingly runing/knowingly ran

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Originally Posted by Tdol

By the way- strange opening as it's got nothing before it.
sky- I'd say over/above our heads
darkness times- darkest?
to the sea where we *will*
make the flow of the history good,- I'd use 'the course of history'
warmth to the songs- in??
We saw bad things.Wars,massacres, -I'd use a colon after things
saw poors- poor
knowingly running- were knowingly runing/knowingly ran

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The writing starts with "by the way" so i think there is no problem.
Why can't i use "poors".I want to give plural meaning.

Thanks...

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Originally Posted by Volcano1985

Hello
Can anyone check the below paragraph for the mistakes if there are.

By the way; to the sky that is always over our head,to the darkest times of the day, to the storms that sometimes blow up ,to the seas where we might drown one day, to the olden times, to the future even though we don't know what it holds, to the history even if it holds many wrongs, to all the beautiful children that have tried to make it good ,to the Donkisot,to the Ernesto “Ç´e" Guevara, to the ways,to the journeys, to the darlings, to the lovemaking ,to the impossibilities of which we can only dream, to the warmth when feeling cold, to the mothers that are warmer than everything, to the fathers, we are sending our own warmth in the songs that take their tastes from these.
We saw bad things. Wars,massacres, children that were maimed or killed.We saw people,societies which had lost their own language ,culture and themselves.We saw flaming villages, cities, forests, ?animals.We saw poor,crying mothers, fathers and children that knowingly (unwittingly?) run to their deaths everyday.We too will die, but despite everything,we will sing songs on this earth’s surface. Thanks World.

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mothers and fathers make poor plural

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Originally Posted by curmudgeon

mothers and fathers make poor plural

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Thanks mate curmudgeon but your writing makes the paragraph's meaning change.Yours doesn't suit its original mean.

poor is not adjective of mothers and fathers there.Its a noun.

In that case, say 'the poor'

or poverty - not sure about flaming animals as well

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Originally Posted by curmudgeon

or poverty - not sure about flaming animals as well

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Its hard to translate some things to the another language...

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Originally Posted by Volcano1985

Its hard to translate some things to the another language...

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While translating remember one thing. It's not enough changing words from one language into another. It's very important to translate the meaning of your text.;-)

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Originally Posted by Harry Smith

While translating remember one thing. It's not enough changing words from one language into another. It's very important to translate the meaning of your text.;-)

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I do so.Just put here if it has mistakes but i see some users changed its original mean.