metaphors

[navi tasan]

Are these noun phrases acceptable:

1-The hammers of his fists (meaning "his fists which are (like) hammers" as in: "He will fight back with the hammers of his fists.")

2-The gems of her eyes (meaning: "her eyes which are (like) gems" and not "the gems that are (shine) in her eyes" which is a possible meaning of the phrase. "Tears welled up in the gems of her eyes.")


3-The sickle of the moon (meaning "the moon which is (like) a sickle" not "the sickle that belongs to the moon")

4-The lightening bolt of his angry gaze

[MikeNewYork]

Originally Posted by navi tasan

Are these noun phrases acceptable:

1-The hammers of his fists (meaning "his fists which are (like) hammers" as in: "He will fight back with the hammers of his fists.")

2-The gems of her eyes (meaning: "her eyes which are (like) gems" and not "the gems that are (shine) in her eyes" which is a possible meaning of the phrase. "Tears welled up in the gems of her eyes.")


3-The sickle of the moon (meaning "the moon which is (like) a sickle" not "the sickle that belongs to the moon")

4-The lightening bolt of his angry gaze

I don't think the first three work very well. That is not the normal way to create simile or metaphor. The fourth is far superior.

[RonBee]

Metaphors are my specialty. :wink:

1-The hammers of his fists (meaning "his fists which are (like) hammers" as in: "He will fight back with the hammers of his fists.")

That would work better as the hammers that are his fists. Notice the direct comparison. The hammers of his fists suggests that he has hammers attached to his fists. Clearly, that is not the intention. :)

The gems of her eyes (meaning: "her eyes which are (like) gems" and not "the gems that are (shine) in her eyes" which is a possible meaning of the phrase. "Tears welled up in the gems of her eyes.")

That would work better as Her eyes shine like gems, but perhaps that is not what you are looking for. (True, that's a simile and not a metaphor, but some say "metaphor" is also the general category that similes and metaphors fall under. Yes, I know that's confusing.)

The sickle of the moon (meaning "the moon which is (like) a sickle" not "the sickle that belongs to the moon")

It would be better to say that the moon looks like a sickle or that the moon is sickle-shaped.

The lightening bolt of his angry gaze

That one is good. However, you might wonder why that one is effective when the others are not. It says to me not that his gaze is a lightning bolt but that feeling his angry gaze is like being hit by a lightning bolt.

Are you writing a novel?

:)

[MikeNewYork]

Originally Posted by RonBee

Metaphors are my specialty. :wink:

That would work better as the hammers that are his fists. Notice the direct comparison. The hammers of his fists suggests that he has hammers attached to his fists. Clearly, that is not the intention. :)

That would work better as Her eyes shine like gems, but perhaps that is not what you are looking for. (True, that's a simile and not a metaphor, but some say "metaphor" is also the general category that similes and metaphors fall under. Yes, I know that's confusing.)

It would be better to say that the moon looks like a sickle or that the moon is sickle-shaped.

That one is good. However, you might wonder why that one is effective when the others are not. It says to me not that his gaze is a lightning bolt but that feeling his angry gaze is like being hit by a lightning bolt.

Are you writing a novel?

:)

Good job, Dr. Metaphor.

[RonBee]

:wink: