short story

[kohyoongliat]

This story is meant for Year 2 students. Could someone please edit it for me? Thanks in advance.

Once a grasshopper saw some ants moving hurriedly. He asked one of them, “Why are you in such a hurry.” One of the ants replied, “Winter is coming. We are collecting food so that when winter comes, we will have food to eat.”
The grasshopper replied, “Why are you collecting food so early. You can do so later.” After saying that, he continued on his way.
The ants collected food day by day. Soon winter came. The ants stayed indoors and were not hungry as they had stored a lot of food..
The grasshopper had no food to eat. He was hungry and cold. He thought of the ants. He went to their house and knocked on the door.
The leader of the ants asked, “Why have you come to visit us?”
The grasshopper replied, “Now I know that I am wrong. I should have collected food before winter came. Could you give me some food?”
“You may come in and stay with us until winter is over. You can also share our food.”
The grasshopper was very happy and grateful to the leader of the ant. “Thank you,” he said.

[Tdol]

Why are you in such a hurry.- ? (& in line 3)
food..- extra full-stop

[kohyoongliat]

Thanks, Tdol, for pointing out the typos. (Is 'typos' the plural? Thanks.)

I'm glad that the passage is free of grammar errors.

[sploke]

Hi Koh for what its worth, here's my 2 cts effort.
Winter is coming -Winter is coming soon.
Why are you collecting food so early -Why are you collecting the food so early?
Now I know that I am wrong -I know now that I am wrong
Could you give me some food -Could you please give me some food?
(Nothing wrong to teach them to be more polite!)...good wishes...

[kohyoongliat]

Thanks, Sploke.