need help editing
could someone please edit this for me.
This is my gift to you on this Easter Sunday.
As I wake up this morning my mind begins its daily routine.
My thoughts accelerate stimulating my heart; my blood rushes through my body. I become conscience of my surroundings and all my knowledge is available to get me through the rest of this day. I arise from the blankets into the cold space yet I remain warm with my usual first thoughts of the day. They are the awareness of my mother.
I look out the window to a cold cloudy day I realize i am looking out the same window you have looked though so many times in the past. Now all that I see becomes beautiful, I see the brilliant colors on the ducks floating through the mist rising from the lake. I look towards the sky above your house, I can feel you in me and I know you are well.
My phone is ringing and I know it is you. Every thing we speak of I already new through our unnconcene connection through god. I return to the window feeling the overwhelming love that we share for each other. The clouds begin separating as a ray of sunlight shines on me and I know this is godís connection between us, and it cannot be taken away.
So I give to you these words:
I have loved you with an everlasting love; therefore I will continue my faithfulness to you forever.
This is God, in action.
Your son steve
Re: need help editing
Some of the expressions you used are used for lovers. Husband and wife, boyfriend and girlfriend.
Originally Posted by flyber
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