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Old 12-May-2004, 16:49
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Hello, could you help me and re-write this article, please? I need it for school and I think I wrote there many mistakes mainly in tences. So, could you find them? Please…

Everything started in New York, where Grace lived. She went for a ride with her good friend Judith and their horses. Judith’s horse’s name was Gulliver. That day they both (Judith and Gulliver) died. Grace injured her leg, so it had to be amputated. Even her horse, Pilgrim, came out of this day hurt. This moment Pilgrim started to behave quite strange and don’t believe people. Grace changed herslef too. She was sometimes very depressed.
Annie read about a horse whisperer in newspapers. Though he lived on the other side of USA, she decided to come to him and ask him to cure the horse. The horse whisperer lived in Montana.
First, Tom, the whisperer, didn’t want to help them, but Annie persuaded him to help Pilgrim. Some first days Annie and her daughter Grace lived in a hotel near Tom’s family’s farm, but the other days Tom’s family let them both live in a small cottage below their house, near the river.
Soon, Annie and Tom fell in love. However Tom had had children and wife called Diane living there on the same farm in the same house with him. There also lived his brother Frank with his wife and children in the house.
Once, Annie’s husband called her and told her he could go there to see them and then to go home with them. Annie didn’t know what to do. She loved Tom, and she didn’t know what to do about her feelings to her real husband, Robert.
So, Robert arrived. Pilgrim was almost cured.
Robert bought two flight tickets to New York (actually he wanted to buy three – it means the third for Annie, but there were only two spare tickets). Even Tom’s family came away – theywent to Disneyland with their children for about one week. Tom had to go to Wyoming because of a matter of horses, but he decided to stay at home, with Annie. So Annie was at the farm only with Tom. They enjoyed it. They rode horses every day.
Finally, the day of Pilgrim’s last cure came. Grace had to come to see him to Montana again. They went there together with Annie and Robert. Tom cured Pilgrim of his fear to everyone and Grace, so he could return home again. But before Grace’s family left, Bookers throw a small party to say goodbye to Grace and her parents. Grace found out that Annie had fell in love with Tom and so she got angry with them. She wanted to frighten them, so she herslef alone went for a ride on Pilgrim. On her ride she met a herd of wild horses.
When Annie and Tom found out she knew about their relationship and that she went away on with horse, they started look for her. They found her with Pilgrim just in the centre of the wild horses‘ herd. Tom tried to save Grace, which was succeed, but he died there. A horse tramped him.
After one year, Annie gave birth to a boy. The child was probably Tom’s, but Robert hoped it was his. Robert didn’t live with Annie any more. He knew she couldn’t love him. Grace lived at Annie and sometimes went to visit or even to live at Robert.
After the year Annie got a letter with a small rope on which was written: ‘Never forget’. It was a rope that Tom wanted to give her before he had died. Frank found it on his desk, so he sent it to her.


My own opinion on this book: I think this book is a very good book. It was also a bestseller, so I think I can’t wonder I like it. It seemed nice to many other people or else they didn’t buy it. There was the character of the main characters described very well. Also the feelings of the people (characters) were described very well. Altough I don’t like any stories or novels about horses, I think this story was fine.
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From that moment Pilgrim started to behave quite strangely and not to believe people. Grace changed too. She was sometimes (I'd cange this to 'sometimes felt') very depressed.
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However Tom had had children and a wife called Diane living there on the same farm in the same house with him. His brother Frank also lived there in the house with his wife and children.
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Robert bought two flight tickets to New York (actually he wanted to buy three – the third for Annie, but there were only two spare tickets)
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Tom had to go to Wyoming because of something to do with horses, but decided to stay at home, with Annie. So she was at the farm alone with Tom. They enjoyed it; they rode horses every day.
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had to come to Montana again to see him.
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But before Grace’s family left, Bookers threw a small party to say goodbye to Grace and her parents.
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Grace found out that Annie had fallen in love with Tom and so she got angry with them.
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When Annie and Tom found out she knew about their relationship and that she had gone away on horse
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Tom tried successfully to save Grace, but he died there. A horse trampled him.
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