Please help me

[HangmaN]

Hi everyone

I'm studying in the Arab Open University, I have an assignment.
Can anyone help me to correct grammar and phrases Mistakes for this essay?

This is the question.

PART B. Write your essay here. Make sure each topic sentence is developed in one body paragraph and supported by details. Use transitions to connect your ideas. Edit your essay when done. (6 points)

and this is my essay and I hope your help

"The purpose of university is education and study. Students prepare to become competent members of society, and they lead people into the right path. Every country has developed universities based on social, economic and traditional needs. Externally, universities in the world would have similar systems. However, a comparison of Arab Open University with other universities shows couple of similarities and some differences.

The Arab university does not require accrual rate While Bahrain of University to require a certain The Arab Open University does not require a certain age; education is available to all the requirement to obtain a certificate of secondary

The study at the University of Bahrain almost every day while the Arab Open University fortnightly, The study at the Bahrain of University traditional while the Arab Open University Advanced study Self-study"

Thank you in advance

[RonBee]

Instead of making suggestions I am going to ask questions. That will (hopefully) encourage you to come up with the answers yourself.
~R

"The purpose of university is education and study.

What is the purpose of study?

Students prepare to become competent members of society, and they lead people into the right path.

Who is supposed to lead people onto the right path?

Every country has developed universities based on social, economic and traditional needs. Externally, universities in the world would have similar systems.

What word there needs to be deleted?

However, a comparison of Arab Open University with other universities shows couple of similarities and some differences.

How can you give a little more balance to that sentence?

The Arab university does not require accrual rate While Bahrain of University to require a certain The Arab Open University does not require a certain age; education is available to all the requirement to obtain a certificate of secondary

How can you rewrite that so that it makes sense in English?

The study at the University of Bahrain almost every day while the Arab Open University fortnightly, The study at the Bahrain of University traditional while the Arab Open University Advanced study Self-study"

Are there any grammar problems there? Are you missing anything?

~R

[HangmaN]

thank you so mush RonBee for help
But I was you told me the essay ok or need to be amendment

If you have a time try to help me again

Have a nice day

[RonBee]

thank you so mush RonBee for help

Thank you so much RonBee for your help.

But I was you told me the essay ok or need to be amendment

But I needed you to tell me if the essay is fine the way it is or if it needs to be changed.

If you have a time try to help me again

If you have the time, try to help me again.

Have a nice day

Have a nice day.

I'm sorry, but the essay is not fine the way it is. It needs lots of improvement before it can even be close to being fine. I asked you the questions I asked you to help you improve things. You chose not to answer one single question.

[RonBee]

"The purpose of university is education and study.

The purpose of a university is education. What is the purpose of study? In other words, why do people study?

[Lwiza]

hey Hangman,

well I guess as RonBee was trying to tell you that your essay needs to improve its idea first that then you can try to correct its grammer.

[RonBee]

hey Hangman,

well I guess as RonBee was trying to tell you that your essay needs to improve its idea first that then you can try to correct its grammer.

The rewriting is as important as anything. If I do that for people they can postpone learning how to do it themselves. When you rewrite you have to look over the original to decide what to keep, what to change, and what to discard. When Hangman wrote "The purpose of university is education and study" he confused "education" and "study". The purpose (reason for the existence) of university is education. You need to study in order to learn (get an education), but it is education that is your reason for being there, not study. (If you are one of those super smart people who can get good marks without studying, maybe you won't need to study at all.)

I was hoping that if he would answer the questions he would be able to make the necessary improvements on his own. (The one about education and study is probably the easiest.)

More learning happens if you figure things out on your own. If, for example, I tell you that there are some punctuation problems in a sentence or group of sentences and you find and correct those problems then more has been accomplished (by you) than if I correct the mistakes myself. (Unfortunately, doing it this way causes me more work than if I rewrite the essay myself. (At least, it seems that way.))

The teacher teaches, but the student has to do the learning.

~R

[HangmaN]

Hi RonBee
I'm sorry
I was very busy so I cannot answer your questions
in sha allah next time I will answer them

RonBee thank you so much