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Hi teachers!

Please, help me with the text below. Would you be so kind and proofread it for me? Are there any errors regarding the use of verbs , spelling or words order?
I`d like to write a more appropriate verb instead of manifest but I cannot find a better one at the moment.

Thank you very much in advance.

Sound Pollution

Sound pollution in Craiova town manifests by / through all aspects, being generated by road, railway , air and industrial traffic and other sources of pollution, as well.
The main element of sound pollution is noise, characterized by levels of intensity, duration, frequency and periodicity.
Noise represents a major risk factor for human health associated with hearing handicap, work stress, and loss of hearing in children born of mothers exposed during their pregnancy or on unborn children.[I`d like to say smth. on the effects of sound pollution on unborn children]
The evaluation and management[ shall I use control instead of management?] of environmental noise represent a priority on the working agenda of the European Parliament and of the Council of Europe.
Romania has transposed the European Community legislation on noise pollution into [?] the Governmental law/decision nr.X.
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Sound Pollution

Sound pollution in Craiova town manifests [pervades all parts of the town] by / through all aspects, being generated by road, railway , air and industrial traffic and other sources of pollution as well.
The main element of sound pollution is noise, characterized by levels of intensity, duration, frequency and periodicity. This is a tautology - sound pollution can only be the result of noise. Try rephrasing the sentence.
Noise represents a major risk factor for human health associated with hearing handicap, work stress, and loss of hearing in children born of mothers exposed during their pregnancy[This is a new one to me - is there proper evidence for this?] or on unborn children.[I`d like to say smth. on the effects of sound pollution on unborn children] [If you do, you really have to provide the references]
The evaluation and management[ shall I use control instead of management? [No - I think management is fine here]] of environmental noise represents a priority on the working agenda of the European Parliament and of the Council of Europe.
Romania has transposed [adopted] the European Community legislation [unlikely ] "Directive"] on noise pollution into [?] and is including it within the Governmental law/decision nr.X.

Sorry, Teia - you have some work to do!
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Sound Pollution

Sound pollution in Craiova town manifests [pervades all parts of the town] by / through all aspects, being generated by road, railway , air and industrial traffic and other sources of pollution as well.
The main element of sound pollution is noise, characterized by levels of intensity, duration, frequency and periodicity. This is a tautology - sound pollution can only be the result of noise. Try rephrasing the sentence.You are right!
Noise represents a major risk factor for human health associated with hearing handicap, work stress, and loss of hearing in children born of mothers exposed during their pregnancy[This is a new one to me - is there proper evidence for this?] or on unborn children.[I`d like to say smth. on the effects of sound pollution on unborn children] -I am not sure. Some scientists try to demonstrate it.[If you do, you really have to provide the references]
The evaluation and management[ shall I use control instead of management? [No - I think management is fine here]] of environmental noise represents a priority on the working agenda of the European Parliament and of the Council of Europe.
Romania has transposed [adopted] the European Community legislation [unlikely ] "Directive"] on noise pollution into [?] and is including it within the Governmental law/decision nr.X.

Sorry, Teia - you have some work to do!

Thank you very much Anglika!
Yes, I have some work to do, but I don`t mind doing it, although I am used to translating literary or everyday conversation texts rather than technical texts.

Thank you again.
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