"Money isn't the most important thing in life"

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Please check my essay which I wrote in preparation to CPE. I'm not only interested in mistake correction but also in what you think about the content. Isn't it too biased and are all the points properly justified?

Task: Money isn't the most important thing in life. Discuss (from "Successful Writing Proficiency" by Virginia Evans).

Gerald Brennan once said: "Those who have some means think that the most important thing in the world is love. The poor know that it is money". Although this statement may seem tongue-in-cheeck, as it goes against the commonly held view of money as inferior to other joys of life, I believe that it is profoundly true.
The popular belief contrasts material wealth with such supposedly free blessings as love or happiness. As "Beatles" put it, "Money can't buy me love". In fact, money and other life goodies are most intimately connected to each other.
I don't maintain that money is a magical key to any person's heart. However, wealth increases one's general chances to be loved, as, with its help, one can be transformed into a much more attractive individual, both physically and personally. Well-cut designer clothes, a personal stylist and plastic surgery as a matter of routine - that all helps to enhance one's looks and give one an edge over one's less affluent rivals. On the other hand, a rich person has enough means and leisure to pursue various interests in order to refine themselves, with the result that they may be very stimulating and charming company.
But even their appearance and personality aside, their lifestyle holds and irresistible fascination for most people, who cannot resist the temptation to partake in its glitter and glamour. Perhaps, similar considerations prompted Oscar Wilde to profess "romance... the priviledge of the rich, not the profession of the unemployed".
Moving on from love to another indeniable asset, health, it should be said that healthy lifestyle, including wholesome nutrition, gym fees and decent holidays, comes at a considerable cost. Should a health problem arise, a rich person has access to an expensive treatment, while poorer patients are denied this opportunity.
Being privileged in terms of love and health, these major constituents of happiness, a well-off person already has an advantage while pursuing this elusive state. Additionaly, money exempts them from the daily drudgery of work, provides them with excellent living standards and enriches their life with an infinite variety of pastimes.
So why is this dismissive view of riches so pervasive? Does this notion serve as a mere consolation to less fortunate members of society? Perhaps, it was to some extent true in the past, when beauty and health were natural gifts which couldn't be obtained by any financial exertion. Today, with all technological and medical advances, money can be traded for other desirables previously considered to depend exclusively on nature and luck.
To sum up, being far from a panacea, wealth is nevertheless capable of vastly improving one's quality of life. Moreover, all things being equal and provided that rational choices are made, there are few variables in human life as conducive to good living as money.