pay for the repair of the window

[angliholic]

A boy named Jack broke an old lady's window. Being afraid of being caught, Jack fled the scene right away ... Finally, he decided to pay for the repair of the window by saving the money he made from delivering newspaper. Three weeks later, he had the money ready.


For a start, is it better to omit "Being" in the above?
Second, will it sound better if I replace "made" with "would make?"
Thanks.

[BobK]

A boy named Jack broke an old lady's window. Being afraid of being caught, Jack fled the scene right away ... Finally, he decided to pay for the repair of the window by saving the money he made from delivering newspaper[s]. Three weeks later, he had the money ready.


For a start, is it better to omit "Being" in the above? I'm not sure it's better; but it'd certainly be OK.
Second, will it sound better if I replace "made" with "would make?" Again. either would do.
Thanks.

You're welcome.

b

[angliholic]

Thanks, Bob.