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Old 04-Nov-2007, 08:11
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Smile I was amazed by the weapons and armor used in times gone by.

Inside the White Tower, I was amazed by the weapons and armor used in times gone by. The Bloody Tower showed me its dark history with messages from the prisoners left on the walls.

I try to rewrite the underlined parts to try out every possible versions as the following:

... in ancient times ... with messages left on the walls from the prisoners.


After cogitating and trying out every possible term, I find that the first part in the original is the best and irresplaceable while the second is not so. Your advice? Thanks.
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Default Re: I was amazed by the weapons and armor used in times gone by.

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Inside the White Tower, I was amazed by the weapons and armor used in times gone by. The Bloody Tower showed me its dark history with messages from the prisoners left on the walls.

I try to rewrite the underlined parts to try out every possible versions as the following:

... in ancient times ... with messages left on the walls from the prisoners.


After cogitating and trying out every possible term, I find that the first part in the original is the best and irresplaceable while the second is not so. Your advice? Thanks.
I`d say:

"....with the prisoners` messages written / inscribed / engraved on the walls."
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Default Re: I was amazed by the weapons and armor used in times gone by.

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I`d say:

"....with the prisoners` messages written / inscribed / engraved on the walls."
Thanks, Teia.
I think your version is more concise.
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