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Old 30-Jun-2004, 08:37
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Would you please kindly edit my edit of someone else's work below, including the title, and what is "pitching the work" in Services (4)? Thanks a lot, BMO

Objectives and Services of the Scriptwriters Association of Fengshan

OBJECTIVES:

1. Raises the standards of the art of scriptwriting.
2. Promotes friendship among scriptwriters.
3. Increases awareness of paramount importance in screenplay and screen production.



SERVICES:

1. Awards outstanding scriptwriter(s).
2. Establishes and maintains collaborative relationship with all who are involved in screen production, both locally and internationally.
3. Provides a unified voice for the screenwriting community in promoting fair practices within the industry.
4. Provides market leads for screenwriters and prepares screenwriters with necessary skills and documents to ensure a mutually beneficial transaction. These include, but are not limited to, pitching the work, agreement document, legal advice and asserting copyrights.
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In the Objectives section, I'd use the infinitve:
1. To raise... etc

4. Provides market leads for screenwriters and prepares screenwriters with THE necessary skills and documents to ensure a mutually beneficial transaction.
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Old 01-Jul-2004, 19:01
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In the Objectives section, I'd use the infinitve:
1. To raise... etc

4. Provides market leads for screenwriters and prepares screenwriters with THE necessary skills and documents to ensure a mutually beneficial transaction.
Thanks tdol, some questions here:

1. In the Ojectives section, we use infinitives, how come infinitives are not used in the Services section?

2. "Friendship" in Objectives (2) and "relationship" in Services (2) are all singular. These can't be plural?

3. In Servies (4), what is pitching the work? Also, agreement document and legal advice should not be plural?

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The objective is to provide something. the services actually do it.

Friendship can be plural if youlike and relationship should be (sorry, I missed it last night).

Pitching is trying to sell an idea to a producer.
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Old 01-Jul-2004, 23:50
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Quote:
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The objective is to provide something. the services actually do it.

Friendship can be plural if youlike and relationship should be (sorry, I missed it last night).

Pitching is trying to sell an idea to a producer.
Thanks.

Is agreement document plural or singular, in Services (4)?

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Plural.
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Old 02-Jul-2004, 18:46
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Plural.
Thanks. We have a good copy now.

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