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[Unregistered]

Hi there,
Can you proofread the following sentence?

THere will be a winter sale in my shopping mall in December. There will be special discounts on clothes, shoes and accessories. Please come and enjoy the bargains.

pete

[Barb_D]

Hi Pete,
Except for that random capital H in THere (which I assume is a typo), your sentences are grammatical, but staring "There will be" and "There will be" twice in a row is not great style. What about "We will have a ..." for the first one?

[not a teacher]

[Naamplao]

Hi there,
Can you proofread the following sentence?

THere will be a winter sale in my shopping mall in December. There will be special discounts on clothes, shoes and accessories. Please come and enjoy the bargains.

pete

I agree with Barb_D...too many "There will be"

Another opening sentence could be.

My shopping mall will be holding a winter sale in December.