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hi , here is a poem i wrote but i am not sure if there any mistake i did , pls check for me thanks in advance
Night is not long for u
There is a soul in me called you
There is a shelter protecting me called family
There is a promise around me called love
There is a hand holding me called supporting
Whenever I am in trouble I won't fear cos you are with me
Whatever I need I will be satisfied cos you always understand me
Wherever I am lost I won't be scattered cos I know you will guide me
This evening, you whispered to me that you won't let me down ever
I showed smile to you without word,the only way I've to express my feeling
I appreciate you, appreciate Lord for sending such a nice gift like you into my life...
- There is a soul in me called you.
There is a shelter protecting me called family.
There is a promise around me called love.
There is a hand holding me called support.
Whenever I am in trouble, I won't be afraid, because you are with me
Whatever I am in need, I will be satisfied, because you always understand me.
Wherever I am lost, I won't be afraid, because I know you will guide me.
This evening, you whispered to me that you won't let me down ever.
I smiled to you without words, the only way I have to express my feelings.
I appreciate you and appreciate the Lord for sending such a nice gift like you into my life.
What do you think?
good thanks a lot!!!
another question at first i add " the" instead " a" in the first paragraph. but when i read it i feel something not flowing. so i changed for "a" . if i use "the" , is it wrong ? pls guide me . i always cannot use a good way for "a" and " the" . make me crazy .
thanks for ur kind help....
Re: good thanks a lot!!!
There is a soul in me called you. (OK)
Originally Posted by RonBee
There is a particular soul in me called you.
Here, "a" refers to 1, one soul. :D
beautiful poem. :D :D 8) :D :D
thank u , u make me feel power...
now i think " a " its good . thx for ur help and make me powered
:D :) :wink:
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