How do native speakers say?

[rachelk72]

I'm doing my assignment about spoken language features and pragmatics issues in the following material.
First of all, I want to know wheather the material is authentic spoken material. The native speaker will say in this way or not.

Policeman: Right then. Just let me check this report form with you before you go. I've got your name and address correct, haven't I?
Mr Wong: Yes, that's right.
Policeman: Now then your son, Joe, and his friend, Peter Tang, found a bag behind a tree in Sai Kung.
Mr Wong: Yes.
Policeman: In the bag they found money, a notebook, a rope, a mobile telephone and jewellery. Was there anything else?
Mr Wong: No, that was all.
Policeman: So they found the bag today, 11th March after 11.10am. That's right, isn't it?
Mr Wong: Yes. All that information is correct.
Policeman: Well, thank you very much, Mr Wong. We'll be in touch with you if we find the owner of the bag or the contents. Goodbye.

Are the undelined words above the features of spoken language?
How about the pragmatics issues?
Speech act: illocutionary( e.g. directives ((I've got your name and address correct, haven't I?)) Is it right?
Any conversational implicature?
No violate conversational maxims, right?
Thanks a lot!

[Ouisch]

The dialog you quoted is definitely British English. In AmE we wouldn't say "right then" or "11th March."

Hopefully a BrE speaker can evaluate the dialog more effectively.

[Tdol]

It sounds more like a written version of speech than genuine speech.

[rachelk72]

Can anyone help me to change it to be more spoken like version?

[RonBee]

Are the undelined words above the features of spoken language?

Better:

Are the underlined words genuine features of spoken language?

(There are other features of spoken language, so "the" doesn't work there.)

~R

[Ouisch]

A rough translation into American English, keeping in mind that police often use brusque, incomplete and colloquial phrases during traffic stops:

Policeman: Right then. Just let me check this report form with you before you go. I've got your name and address correct, haven't I?
Mr Wong: Yes, that's right.

Is this your correct name and current address?
Yes.
OK, please wait here while I check this out.

Policeman: Now then your son, Joe, and his friend, Peter Tang, found a bag behind a tree in Sai Kung.
Mr Wong: Yes.
Policeman: In the bag they found money, a notebook, a rope, a mobile telephone and jewellery. Was there anything else?
Mr Wong: No, that was all.

Now then, you stated that your son Joe and his friend, Peter Tang, found a bag behind a tree in Sai Kung, is that correct?
Yes.
They stated that the bag contained money, a notebook, rope, a cellphone and jewelry. Was there anything else inside the bag?
No, that was all.

Policeman: So they found the bag today, 11th March after 11.10am. That's right, isn't it?
Mr Wong: Yes. All that information is correct.
Policeman: Well, thank you very much, Mr Wong. We'll be in touch with you if we find the owner of the bag or the contents. Goodbye.

So they claimed to have found the bag today? March 11th? At approximately 11:10 AM? Is that correct?
Yes, sir, that is correct.
OK, thank you for your time Mr. Wong. We'll be in touch with you if we need any further information. Here is my card in case you want to contact me. Thanks again, and have a good day.