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Old 31-Jan-2008, 18:56
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Hello everyone
I'd like to ask if the following text is written correctly.

An issue of the pathology of the ear in the company was raised a year ago. This pathology is a problem for many industries.
The Sanitary Laboratory of the Industrial Hygiene Section has the newest equipment enabling to conduct reliable and accurate measurements of noise levels, which makes possible to obtain accurate data on working conditions in the company.

So far there is no data base containing employees’ names, their working places, employees with detected pathology of the ear, information about their occupational histories along with measured noise levels in their workplaces as well as possible detected excesses of the maximum permissible noise levels.
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Old 31-Jan-2008, 19:52
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Hello everyone
I'd like to ask if the following text is written correctly.

An issue of the pathology of the ear in the company was raised a year ago. This pathology is a problem for many industries.
The Sanitary Laboratory of the Industrial Hygiene Section has the newest equipment enabling to conduct reliable and accurate measurements of noise levels, which makes possible to obtain accurate data on working conditions in the company.

So far there is no data base containing employees’ names, their working places, employees with detected pathology of the ear, information about their occupational histories along with measured noise levels in their workplaces as well as possible detected excesses of the maximum permissible noise levels.
No, but it's understandable. Here's one possible correction:

In the company, an issue concerning the pathology of the ear was raised a year ago. This pathology is a problem for many industries.
The Sanitary Laboratory of the Industrial Hygiene Section has the newest equipment enabling it to conduct reliable and accurate measurements of noise levels, which makes it possible to obtain accurate data on working conditions in the company.

Lou
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Old 31-Jan-2008, 20:21
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No, but it's understandable. Here's one possible correction:

In the company, an issue concerning the pathology of the ear was raised a year ago. This pathology is a problem for many industries.
The Sanitary Laboratory of the Industrial Hygiene Section has the newest equipment enabling it to conduct reliable and accurate measurements of noise levels, which makes it possible to obtain accurate data on working conditions in the company.

Lou
Thank you very much, louhevly.
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