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Old 10-Mar-2008, 13:50
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Hi there,
can you proofread this sentence?

As online possibilities grow, the scope for harm also increases. Virtual bonds will further alienate humans physically from each other.

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Grammatically it looks fine but you could change it slightly to "further physically alienate..."

What do you mean by "virtual bonds"?
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Hi there,

I don't understand what 'virtual bonds' is either. I think the writer wanted to mean the connection between people through internet but the bonds are not real ones, but virtual (through internet). Am I correct? OR any words to replace 'virtual bonds'?

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That makes sense and is probably a good choice of words. Virtual is a common word for things on the internet like virtual reality. It looks real but it's not.
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