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During the spring vocation ,I went to visit my cousin for 2 days .She lives with her husband and daughther how were in a trip ,so it was the best time to meet her .I told kelley that i am interested to buy a new furniture.We went to some stores close to her house.One of this store had European furniture style and good prices.I liked it,so i bought a sofa and coffee table .In the afternoon ,we wanted to prepare lunch ,we decided that each one cooked somethink different.we went to supermarket to buy the ingredient that we need to cook.we learned a lot of things ,we showed each other some frozen food and cookies that we tried them befor ,i told her about the discount card that she can use it .we had a wonderful time when we were cooking.The second day ,we stayed home .

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During the spring vacation, I went to visit my cousin for 2 days. She lives with her husband and daughter, who were away on a trip, so it was the best time to meet with her. I told Kelley that I was interested in buying new furniture. We went to some stores close to her house. One of these stores had European-style furniture and good prices. I liked the style, so I bought a sofa and a coffee table. In the afternoon, we wanted to prepare lunch, we decided that each of us should cook something different. We went to thesupermarket to buy the ingredients that we needed. We learned a lot of things, we showed each other frozen food and cookies that we had each tried before, I told her that I had a discount card and that she could use it. We had a wonderful time while we were cooking. The second day, we stayed home .

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