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The more you understand an original works, the more you admire her elegance, the less you are able to translate her, the harder you can catch the original perfectly. Ungraceful sentences, abundant points but poor descriptions. All are because of my weakness in nature. Well, I'm not depressive, keeping doing what's supposed not to do. Only joy seems have gone away. No achievements, no happiness.That we all believe.

I.Are they grammatically right?
II. Can I replace the black with "the more understand an original works, the more admire her elegance, the less translate her, the harder catch the original perfectly"; or, "the more understanding an original works, the more admiring her elegance, the less translating her, the harder catching the original perfectly" ?
Please.

[Soup]

The more you understand her original work, the more you admire her elegance, the less you are able to translate her and the harder it is to catch the original perfectly. Ungraceful sentences, abundant points but poor descriptions are all because of my weak nature(?). Well, I'm not depressed; I am just doing what I am not supposed to be doing. Only joy seems to have gone away. No achievements, no happiness. That we all believe.

[puzzle]

How about my second question? Please.

[Soup]

The sentences were ungrammatical.

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SoupRe: proofreading

The more you understand her original work, the more you admire her elegance, the less you are able to translate her and the harder it is to catch the original perfectly.

Thanks, Soup. You change "an original work" to "her original work", I understand you think the writer is a female, right? But, I use "her" as pronoun representing an work, an novel,..etc. So, is it ok about my "the more you understand an original work, ....." ?

[Soup]

It's poetic, but nevertheless not expressed that way in English.