- 1 Post By Anglika
Hi, Pls help to correct the mistakes in the following essay, thanks.
Cats are friendly and affectionate animal towards human beings. They are especially lovable when they are kittens, their cartoon appearances always fascinate us.
Cats lead mysterious lives of themselves as well. As kittens grow into cats, one of things that fascinates us most about cats is the popular belief they have nine lives. The other thing we are interested in is why cats can fly, cats' ability to survive from falls is based on fact, for some institute have made a study of many cats falling from a high building, only few of them died from shock or injuries.
Cats are clean animals, they always like to lap their fur to clean it. But they are also bellicose animals, most cats remain suspicious of humans all their lives.
Because they are friendly and clean, a lot of people like to keep a cat as a pet.
You have an instant illogicality - you start by saying that they are friendly and affectionate, and then say they are suspicious of people.
Originally Posted by wuwei
As a whole it looks like a group of facts grabbed from various sources and strung together in no particular order. I think you should do a rewrite with a proper start, middle and end.
Cats and their nature
Cats and their unusual capacities [always landing on their feet]
Cats and humans
Cats are friendly and affectionate animals, especially lovable as kittens.
(their cartoon appearances always fascinate us??).
They lead mysterious lives and as they grow, one of things that fascinates us most is the popular belief that they have nine lives. For instance, they have a seemingly innate ability to survive falls, and some institutes have even studied what percentage of cats have died or been injured after a fall.
They are hygenic animals, always lapping their fur to keep it clean, and because of this a lot of people like to keep a cat as a pet.
They can be quite bellicose and although friendly, most cats remain suspicious of humans throughout their lives.
Pls correct again, thanks
Thanks, because I am a beginner. Now the only thing I can do is to imitate the sentences in my English book, all the essays I written is according to cue given by the writter of the book. So it seem that the essay is grabbed from various sources.
Could I rewrite it like this? Pls help again.
Originally Posted by wuwei
Last edited by wuwei; 22-May-2008 at 14:39.
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