please, check my dialogue

[Flyby]

This diaslogue is for acting. So i want you to check my dialogue i made wheather or not there are any problems.

Sun: Hey, I'm sorry for late.
Min: That's all right. Why are you late?
Sun: Umm.. I went to see off my son. I was so happy to see him because I hadn't seen my son for a long time. My son came back to Ulsan last weekend.
Min: Did he give you some presents? I heard that your son made great money these days.
Sun: Yes, yes. I got the very very big present.
Min: What is it?
Sun: Look at this. This is the very present I got.
Min: Wow, Isn't it a diamond? It's so beautiful!
Sun: Have you got a big present from your son?
Min: Hey! My necklace is still around my neck shining.
Sun: Ha ha ha, is it expensive ?
Min: Yeah. This is special-ordered necklace which is the only one in the world.
Sun: Yeah, I know. It was a joke. Our sons have grown up well.
Min: But my son's couple lives in discord because daughter-in-law spends too much money.
Sun: Oh, oh, I'm sorry to hear that.
Min: As you know, it is too different between her age and our age, isn't it?
Sun: Yeah... I miss our past and my husband when he was young.
Min: You remember the story that I always told you?
Sun: Do you mean the event you met your husband at the first time? Yeah, it is really lovely.

Min is thinking back..

At the airport
Mom: Don't you hear my word? My sweetie, think one more time, please. It's too dangerous for traveling alone!
Min: Oh, mom.. It's OK. Nowadays many people travel alone and I'm going to stay in my friend's house.
Mom: But...

Announcement: Asiana Airlines is pleased to announce that we will begin pre-boarding of flight CC 620 to Hawaii through gate D57.

Min: Oh, Mon, its' time to go. I'll call you when I arrive~(하고 뛰어간다)
Mom: Oh, sweetie!! Take care!

Narration: In front of beach. When I was looking at the see, A handsome guy taking pictures was standing beside me. When I was looking at him, he was also looking at me and we became almost fall in love at the first sight each other.

Hae: Umm.. Are you alone?
Min: Yes, I'm in traveling alone. Nice to meet you. Are you alone too?
Hae: Yes, I'm alone too. Nice to meet you too. I'm Park Hae-il. What's your name?
Min: I'm Min ji. Gu min ji.
Hae: Oh, such a beautiful name I've heard!
Min: Thank you.
Hae: Miss Gu, A festival is going to be held here tomorrow. If you're OK, Will you with me tomorrow?
Min: What kind of festival?
Hae: It's called as 'the Macadamia Festival'. It's one of the famous festivals in Hawaii actually.
Min: Wow, it seems to be great. But I don't know. I'm going to leave here to meet my friend next day.
Hae: Oh, It's a great pity that I can't be with you tomorrow.
Min: Anyway, what's that in your hand? Are you a photographer?
Hae: Oh, no. This is a just hobby.
Min: Wow, could I see your picture?
Hae: Yes, whenever you want. Here it is.
Min: Oh no.. The camera is completely soaked??
Hae: Yeah.. It completely died...
Min: I'm so sorry.. If you don't mind, I want to pay for it.
Hae: Oh, you don't need to pay for this, but..
Min: But what..?

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[RonBee]

Sun: Hey, I'm sorry I'm late.
Min: That's all right. Why are you late?
Sun: Umm.. I went to see my son off. I was so happy to see him because I hadn't seen him for a long time. My son came back to Ulsan last weekend.
Min: Did he give you some presents? I heard that your son makes a lot of money these days.
Sun: Yes, yes. I got a very nice present.
Min: What is it?
Sun: Look at this!
Min: Wow, Isn't it a diamond? It's so beautiful!
Sun: Did you get a nice present from your son?
Min: Hey! My necklace is still around my neck shining.
Sun: Ha ha ha, is it expensive ?
Min: Yeah. This is a specially made necklace. It is one of a kind.
Sun: Yeah, I know. It was a joke. Our sons have grown up well.
Min: But my son's marriage is in trouble because his wife spends too much money.
Sun: Oh, oh, I'm sorry to hear that.