Kindly correct the following sentences

[JRD]

Sub: Leave Extension

Dear Sir,

This refers to the telephone call received from Mr. X regarding the above subject.

He had to re-join the work today, but to vain he had been admitted in the hospital due to high blood sugar and other discomforts. Now his doctor advised him to take another two week for bed rest, so he requested us to grant him an additional leave starting from 22.06.08 to 06.07.08

Under this circumstances, I would request you to look into this matter and kindly do the needful.

Also, note that he will submit the medical certificate upon his arrival.

[sarat_106]

Sub: Leave Extension

Dear Sir,

This refers to the telephonic call received from Mr. X regarding the above subject.

He had to re-join the work today, but unfortunately (to vain) he had been admitted in the hospital due to high blood sugar and other discomforts. Now his doctor has advised him to take bed rest for another two weeks, So he has requested us to grant him additional leave starting from 22.06.08 to 06.07.08

Under this circumstances, I would request you to look into this matter and (kindly) do the needful.

Please note that he will submit the medical certificate (upon)on his return from leave.(arrival.)

Delete the words in the brackets.

[Anglika]

Dear Sir,

This refers to the telephone call received from Mr. X regarding his need for additional leave.

He had to re-join the work today He was due to return to work today, but to vain he had been admitted but he has been admitted to hospital due to high blood sugar and other discomforts problems. Now his doctor has advised him to take another two weeks of bed rest, so he has requested us to grant him additional leave for the period 22.06.08 to 06.07.08

Under the circumstances, I would request you accede to this request and kindly do the needful.

Also, note that he will submit the medical certificate upon his return

Since you are both working in the same company, should this not be addressed to someone by name> Dear Mr/Ms xxxxxxx ?