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I want to create supense, hype around the jewellery brand saying something is coming for modern woman. Kindly suggest me if you could something better than the following 'A work of art, created by master craftsmen, especially for the woman of today'Thanks in advance
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It looks ok to me. The second comma could be omitted.
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It looks ok to me. The second comma could be omitted.
how about the following:Master craftsmen work in town, limited edition- 88 pieces only, for the woman of today.
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Your original was much better. It catches the attention, says all that is needed, and is grammatically correct.
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