The Olympic Games

[wuwei]

Hi, pls help to correct the grammar in following sentences, thanks.

The 2008 Olympic Game will be held in BeiJing next month, it is a festival for people all over the world. It is either a bridge to connect the freindship between people from different counties, or a good stage to show technique strength of different countries.
Last week, I got a news that the swimming records had been updated serval times due to the new swimsuit application. New materials has been apply to this type of swimsuit, it helped competitors to get a higher speed by reducing the resistance of water. I think, by the improvement of techniques, more and more records will be updated.
It is also a big challenge to ensure all athletes's security. Yesterday, 2 people was killed and 14 was injuired in a terror explosions in downtown Kunming, the capital city of southwest China's Yunnan province. I do think the peace is the major tune of Olympic games, this type of terror raid will be condemned by all human beings.

[thedaffodils]

The 2008 Olympic Game will be held in BeiJing next month, it is a festival for people of all over the world. It is either a bridge to connect the freindship ( typo) between people from different counties, or a good stage to show technique strength of different countries.

either A or B : You choose one of them but not both.

It is a bridge to connect ..., and a good stage ...

Last week, I got a piece of news that the swimming records had been updated serval (typo) times due to the new swimsuit application. New material has been applied to this type of swimsuit, it helps competitors to get a higher speed by reducing the resistance of water. I think, by the improvement of techniques, more and more records will be updated.

1. News is an uncountable noun;
2. Microsoft Word processor has the function of checking misspelt words

It is also a big challenge to ensure all athletes's security. Yesterday, 2 people was killed and 14 was injuired in a terrible explosion in the downtown of Kunming, the capital of Yunnan province. I do think peace is the major tune of Olympic Games, this type of terror raid ( What type of terrorist attack can be tolerated? ) should be condemned by all human beings.

I am not a teacher.

[thedaffodils]

this type of terror raid will be condemned by all human beings.

Terrorist attacks such as this should be condemned by...

[thedaffodils]

The 2008 Olympic Games will be held in BeiJing next month, it is a festival for people all over the world.

Since the Games will be held in next month, surely it is held in 2008. I think your expression is not concise enough.

My try:

Beijing Olympic Games will kick off next month, it is a festival ...

OR

The 29th Olympic Games will soon be held in Beijing next month...

[tedtmc]

The 2008 Olympic Games to be held in Beijing next month is a festival for people from all over the world.

not a teacher

[thedaffodils]

Yesterday, 2 people were killed and 14 were injuired

Not a teacher