Sales Manager recruitment ad kindly check

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The incumbent will have to look for sales operation in the showroom direct interaction with the customer, rapport building, he/she will also be responsible to increase the sale by putting their best effort and using their convincing power and knowledge and motivating the sales team. Professionals with a minimum of four years experience inluxury ill be preferred. Pay package Rs. 450,000p.a + incentives

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Kindly check the following para for grammar and style & can we reduce the text?

The incumbent will have to look for sales operation in the showroom direct interaction with the customer, rapport building, he/she will also be responsible to increase the sale by putting their best effort and using their convincing power and knowledge and motivating the sales team. Professionals with a minimum of four years experience inluxury ill be preferred. Pay package Rs. 450,000p.a + incentives

Thanks in advance!

The position requires the overseeing of sales operations in the showroom, as well as direct interaction and rapport with customers. The successful applicant will also be responsible for increasing sales and motivating the sales team. Professionals with a minimum of four years of sales in luxury goods will be preferred. Remuneration: Rs. 450,000 p.a. + bonus.