please help me to correct this letter professionaly becuase I am studing IELTS
Topic: you want to sell some of your furniture, you think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you?
-explain why are selling.
-describe the furniture.
-suggest a date when your friend can come and see the furniture.
Dear Diana, Hello I hope everything is fine.
I must tell you about selling my furniture.
Diana, do you remember I told you that I had decision to move to abroad. Fortunately, everything was going well and fast. So I will move to Australia in a month. As a result I have to sell my furniture such as chairs, desks, oven and cabinets.
I was wandering if you like buy some of them. By the way, you know my furniture is pretty new because I bought them less than a year.
Finally, what about coming over for dinner on Sunday and have look? Sunday is holiday and I think you have free time. If its not alright, please let me know.
If there is anything I could do please call.
Re: please help me to correct this letter professionaly becuase I am studing IELTS
This has problems with the format- look at the start, the 'hello' greeting, and the use of her name in the text. It's a letter not a phone call.
There are tense errors- Fortunately, everything was going well and fast.
Wrong verb choices: I had decision
Wrong words- wandering
Also, check articles, punctuation, and things like 'its' instead of 'it's'
Make sure that you answer the question- where's the description of the furniture? 'Pretty new' is not much of a description.
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