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According to that organization, Ira has executed 26 out of the 32 teenagers condemned to death penalty since January 2005. There were also 2 executions in Saudi Arabia, the same number in Sudan, one execution in Yemen and one in Pakistan, stated the organization.

In these countries, more than 100 convicted youths await in the death corridor the outcome of their appeal.





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According to this organization, Iran has executed 26 out of the 32 teenagers condemned to death since January 2005. There were also two executions in Saudi Arabia, the same number in Sudan, one execution in Yemen and one in Pakistan.

In these countries, more than 100 convicted youths on death row await the outcome of their appeals.

(Small numbers, some say 1-10 other 1-20, we would be more likely to write as words, but don't mix words and figures as you did. I changed that to this because I assume that the reference is to something in the previous sentence. If it is much further back, you might want to use the name.)
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