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[Zoe2008]

1. How is status for 2000 pcs of CH789? Are there 100% goods available for inspection on Sept 16? Please confirm today.
2. 5000 pcs of R1700 were failed inspection yesterday as the drop test problem. Please provide us your rework schedule ASAP.
3. We will perform the inspection on Sept 17 instead of 16, as the goods can not have 100% available on this day. Please keep an eye on the schedule and not further delay will be accepted.

[colloquium]

1. How is the status for the 2000 pcs of CH789? Will all the goods be available for inspection on Sept 16? Please confirm today.

2. 5000 pcs of R1700 failed (or the passive "were failed by") inspection yesterday because of (I think this is what you mean?) the drop test problem. Please provide us with your rework schedule ASAP.

3. We will perform the inspection on Sept 17 instead of 16, as the goods will not be 100% available on this date. Please keep an eye on the schedule as no further delays will be accepted.

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