corrections in a sentence

[musicgold]

Hi,

The following first sentence is by a native English speaker. I feel it can be improved with a few changes. The second sentence is my version, with the changes highlighted in red. Could you please comment on my changes and also explain a bit?

1. The below graph plots the sum of the 3 largest ETF holdings (not truly physical demand, but plays its role in directional move for gold price and is often a good signal for top or bottom in gold price).

2. The below graph plots the sum of the 3 largest ETF holdings (not truly the physical demand, but plays its role in directional moves for the gold price and is often a good signal for a top or bottom in the gold price).

Thanks,

MG.

[susiedqq]

1. The graph below plots the sum of the 3 largest ETF holdings (not a true physical demand, but the role it plays in the directional move for gold prices, which is often a good signal for top or bottom gold prices).

[musicgold]

susiedqq,

Thanks.

Can you please suggest any other construction for the part 'good signal for top or bottom gold prices' that either uses 'in the gold price' or 'in gold prices'. I want know whether I can use any articles for the nouns top and bottom.

[susiedqq]

good signal for fluctuations in gold prices.