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Old 21-Oct-2004, 03:53
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Default Should I start a new paragraph where it begins Even though

Rocky can sometimes be naughty. He jumps on my bed and tries to tear the sheets. I would
punish him by not playing with him. Even though Rocky is a big responsiblity, I still enjoy taking care of him.
Should I begin a new paragraph where it says
Even though Rocky is a big responsibilty, I still
enjoy taking care of him.
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Old 21-Oct-2004, 09:55
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You don't have to, but if I can make a purely subjective point, it breaks somewhat the flow of the paragraph.:
1) Rocky can be naughty (why's that?) =>
2) He jumps on my bed and... (oh, bad dog) =>
3) I would punish him (yeah, that's normal) =>
4) Even though taking care of R. is a big responsibility (oh, that's the bottom line already?)

1, 2 and 3 work well together, but there's no smooth transition between 3 and 4.

Oh well, maybe it's all hogwash after all

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