LPG refill cylinder

[rmsh16]

Pl. proofread.


Dear Sir,

I am booking for the refill cylinder through email after my umpteen tries to your landline numbers (41144619-20, 25656398 etc.)

Please arrange to deliver the refill Indane LPG Cylinder to the below mentioned address on priority.

Name: XXXXX
Consumer No: XXXX
Address: XXXXX

Waiting List No: ___________
Booking Date: 05/11/2008

Please acknowledge by reverting the waiting list number.

Cheers
Rasna

[Reemy]

Well, I believe this is a business letter, so I think you better keep words formal, (umpteen) is informal, you can easily use (many). Also this (on priority) seems strange; There are correct usages with priority as (top priority, first priority, on your list of priorities).

[SUDHKAMP]

Date : 05/Nov/2008

To,
The Indane Gas Agency,
Baswangudi, Bangalore. 500000

Subject : Delay in booking by telephone numbers.
Reference : My consumer no. 123456
Dear Sir,

I am forced to book for the refill cylinder through email after my umpteen tries to your landline numbers (41144619-20, 25656398 etc.) failed to evoke any response for last five days.

Kindly arrange to deliver the refill Indane LPG Cylinder at the address with top priority.

Name: XXXXX
Consumer No: XXXX
Address: XXXXX

Waiting List No: ___________
Booking Date: 05/11/2008

Kindly acknowledge the same at your earliest.

Thanking You,

Yours truly,

(RASNA RAMESH)