Grammatical error correction [urgent]

Dear all,

On the following sentence, is there any grammatical error? What I'm trying to say in the following sentence is that: I want to add more office locations for my employer's consideration for me to work in.

"I hope to (include/add) Singapore, Hong Kong, Shanghai, Beijing, Taipei and Kuala Lumpur into your consideration (for) my office preferences."


Thank you.

sampahmel

inputs please?:-D

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Originally Posted by sampahmel

Dear all,

On the following sentence, is there any grammatical error? What I'm trying to say in the following sentence is that: I want to add more office locations for my employer's consideration for me to work in.

"I hope to (include/add) Singapore, Hong Kong, Shanghai, Beijing, Taipei and Kuala Lumpur into your consideration (for) my office preferences."


Thank you.

sampahmel

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Possibilities:

"Please include Singapore, Hong Kong, Shanghai, Beijing, Taipei and Kuala Lumpur as you consider possible office locations for me."

"As you consider future staffing possibilities, please keep in mind Singapore, Hong Kong, Shanghai, Beijing, Taipei and Kuala Lumpur. I would be delighted to work in any of these cities."

"I would be very willing to relocate to Singapore, Hong Kong, Shanghai, Beijing, Taipei, or Kuala Lumpur. I hope you will keep me in mind if there are opening in any of the offices in these cities."

"I would like to mention, for your consideration, my preference for Singapore, Hong Kong, Shanghai, Beijing, Taipei, or Kuala Lumpur as possible future work locations."

I hope this is helpful,

Petra