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Help me change this sentence
This may not be a problem in ordinary days but in a recession time it is hard for people to change their habits therefore may empty their pockets very soon.
I want to explain the idea that it is not good to spend too much and too quickly, how can i change my sentence to make it looks grammatically correct without changing too much on the structure?
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Re: Help me change this sentence
This may not be a problem in [strike]ordinary days[/ normal times [strike] but in a recession time it is hard for people to change their habits therefore so they may find their pockets wallets empty very soon fast
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Re: Help me change this sentence

Originally Posted by
gdzack
This may not be a problem in ordinary days but in a recession time it is hard for people to change their habits therefore may empty their pockets very soon.
I want to explain the idea that it is not good to spend too much and too quickly, how can i change my sentence to make it looks grammatically correct without changing too much on the structure?
How about:
During a recession, people find it hard to reduce their spending habits to match their reduced income, thus quickly emptying their pockets.
Less change to the structure:
Under ordinary circumstances, spending is not usually a problem, but when there is a recession, people find it difficult to change their spending habits, quickly emptying their pockets.
Better:
Under ordinary circumstances, spending is not usually a problem. When there is a recession, however, people find it difficult to fit their spending habits to the new facts. This causes their pockets to empty quickly.
Last edited by Speedwell; 06-Feb-2009 at 23:00.
Reason: Original sentence is correct, but looking at it again, I find it changes the structure too much.
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