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Old 06-Dec-2004, 01:03
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Default can anyone help to correct my body paragraph and grammar?

Writing POVs was very interesting. POV is an in-class writing that we had to finish it in about 10-20 minutes. POV mean Points Of View. We have to write the POV after we read an article. For example, one of my POV’s topics is “what’s the most important factor in success?” Taking action is the most important factor in success. My idea focused on the disadvantages of not taking any action. I expressed my opinion and support my statement with my own experience. I pointed out that we won’t get anything if we didn’t take any action. So it helped us to succeed. While writing POV made me to think more deeply of the article, it also helped me to get more idea for my essay.
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Old 06-Dec-2004, 01:12
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Default Re: can anyone help to correct my body paragraph and grammar?

the 'it' in "So it helped us to succeed" is pretty ambiguous, replace 'it' with what 'it' actually is

". . . and support my statement . . . "

support -> supported

". . . with my own experience."

not necessarily wrong, but most likely you want experience -> experiences

". . . get more idea for my . . . "

idea -> ideas

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