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Old 09-Dec-2004, 12:45
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Default Polish needed
My eyes hurt with envy,
My mouth is slobbery,
But in my pocket there’s no money,
Because I am a navvy.

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Old 09-Dec-2004, 14:20
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Default Re: Polish needed
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Originally Posted by NewHope
My eyes hurt with envy,
My mouth is slobbery,
But in my pocket there’s no money,
Because I am a navvy.

(Not by me)
This is rather negative. Why so harsh?
Contents aside I do not like slobbery in line 2.
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