hello...I need help

[opio]

I want to study at Vancouver college and I have to write cover latter,but I have a problem with that.i send you my variant about that.I think that it is a simple,and I don't like it.If you can help me I will be greatful....



Dear Mr/Ms
I saw your advertisement for the opportunity to learn English
at English Bay College,
and I am interested, and I want to study at your
college this year.
I need to use English every day in my country, so
I have to improve it.
I feel that is necessary to keep my development in this direction.
To learn at your college would be very useful for me and
my social experience, because I will find more
opportunity in my country, when I finish your course.
You have a big experience with people from all over the world, so
I think you are the right place where I will improve my English skills
with your help.
I welcome the opportunity to study and meet other international students.
Also, I would be glad to meet your culture, traditions
and your beatiful nature.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Your sincerely

[mad1982]

If you're applying to a language school, I'd leave your letter the way it is because it provides information for your potential teachers about areas of English you need to work on.

M.

[Jaycee]

I agree with MAD 1982, as it shows that you have some level of English spelling and grammer, but indicates, maybe, where you are in your progress. I would leave it as written.