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Old 01-Mar-2005, 18:19
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I must say I find your corrections very accurate, I can feel that my english level is increasing with this exercises... Well... thank you very much...

I have another small parragraph for checking:

The core question is: “How can organizations use the “Darwiportunistic” phenomena for develop their knowledge management efforts?”. In order to answer this question, this work compares the features of German and Mexican organizations in the intersection between the “Darwiportunismus” and “Knowledge Management”. This research is based in the principle that analyzing and comparing two wide different cultures, highlight successful practices. The instruments where carefully designed for prevent the noise that may be caused when two cultures are compared.

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The core question is: “How can organizations use the “Darwiportunistic” phenomena to develop their knowledge management efforts?”. In order to answer this question, this work compares the features of German and Mexican organizations in the intersection between the “Darwiportunismus” and “Knowledge Management”. This research is based on the principle that analyzing and comparing two widely/very (I prefer very) different cultures, highlight (will highlight, or highlights) successful practices. The instruments were carefully designed to (repeat mistake) prevent the noise (I'd change this) that may be caused when two cultures are compared.
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thank you very much...

Instead of : "The instruments were carefully designed to prevent the noise that may be caused when two cultures are compared."

Do sounds better: "The instruments were carefully designed to avoid cultural noise in the findings."?


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thank you very much...

Instead of : "The instruments were carefully designed to prevent the noise that may be caused when two cultures are compared."

Do sounds better: "The instruments were carefully designed to avoid cultural noise in the findings."?


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