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Old 17-Nov-2005, 10:31
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I have tried wrtting an opinion essay on 'Romeo and Juliet', 600-800 words, but cant seem to produce that amount of words. Please help...

This is the statement:
'Could Romeo and Juliet been truly in love? They were only wound teenagers infatuated with each other.' Dicuss with supporting references from the play 'Romeo and Juliet'.

I belive that at first it might seem like an infatuation but ultimately it was true-love. I started off with a rough plan:
1st point: Balcony scene-they kissed ect...expressing their love in great haste
However, they shown a deph of passion by expressing their love through poems...(Quotes...)
2nd: Juliet could have taken easier path by marrying Paris instead of Rome but she chooses not to...
3rd: fight all odds to be together-both from feuding families, Romeo killed Tybalt (Juliet's cousin)...
4th: they both killed themselves rather than not be together.

In my actual essay,
Intro: I talked about how it feels to be in love(eg:chemistry), then i refered it to 'Romeo and Juliet' saying that they were infact truely in love...
In the first paragraph i defined the terms 'love'.
Then I went in with my points stated above and expand and provideing quotes.
In the conclusion i restated that they were truely in love by fighting all odds...then i mentioned that becsause of their love they have brought peace back into Veron.

Please tell me how i would improve my essay and what else i could do to further expand and make the essay stronger.
And if u do not know anything about 'Romeo and Juliet' cna u plz give an outline on what needs to be in an oppinion essay. eg: Intro needs to have this...what i cant use in oppinion essay...
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Default Re: Help on 'Opininon Essay'

There's also the fact that they are described as star-crossed lovers- fate brought them together, so has to be something more than a teenage infatuation.

However, why not introduce some of the arguments that suggest it might have been an infatuation- Romeo has been in 'love' before, but then show how this love is different as it has to transcend the feud between the families.
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