#1  
Old 23-Jan-2006, 21:08
Junior Member
 
Join Date: Sep 2005
Posts: 51
Member Type: Student or Learner
Default Correction of article

I´d like to ask you for correction of this article and giving some feedback
many thanks in advance
Petr


How can you become hero or heroine?
At first you must consider who are heroes and heroines nowadays in the Czech Republic. We can say there are only two groups of people who are idols for the youth.
One of them is Czech sportsmen such as football, hockey or tennis players. Hašek, Čech or Novák are names of the most popular ones who show excellent performance in international championships and make our state known world-wide. Therefore Czechs are proud of them and admire their fantastic achievements. Maybe, we also believe that a big part of their great success belongs to us. It can be really interesting to become such as sportsman but you should be hard-working, brave, energised and physically fit. It can be also a very tiring and dangerous way to gain popularity because you must think about possible injures.
Another group consists of singers, models, actors or actresses who should be attractive and charming. Moreover, singers should be musically talented and have an excellent sonorous voice. One of the most popular singers is Karel Gott who is pop star for more than thirty years. If you know him you surely remember his fantastic long career, which he managed thanks to his proper behaviour, gentle character and beautiful appearance loved by women. Other singers are famous for their extravagance or exceptionality in some way for example for their opinions, attitude to their lives, unusual style of music or for public scandals with drugs, alcohol, women or with breaching of the law. Many of them became known very quickly but they often dispose of brief career too. Only the best of them can survive in the wilderness of show business. So don’t forget everything as well as success isn’t forever and managing of popularity shouldn’t be the biggest priority of your life!
At the end I’d like to mention that our point of view and preferences are influenced especially by mass medias, magazines, friends, relations or by our family in good or bad way. That’s why it depends on a lot of things in your life that could determine your attempt to become hero or heroine. Good luck!
  #2  
Old 24-Jan-2006, 01:38
Editor, UsingEnglish.com
 
Join Date: Nov 2002
Posts: 34,371
Home Country: UK
Native Language: British English
Current Location: Philippines
Member Type: English Teacher
Default Re: Correction of article

How can you become hero or heroine?- a hero...
At first- Firstly,
such as sportsman- a
energised- energetic
possible injures- injuries
who should be attractive- should be or are?
who is pop star for more- has been a pop star
attitude to their lives- unclear phrase- lifestyles?
breaching of the law- breaking the law
they often dispose of brief career - they often only have a short career
At the end- Lastly,
mass medias- the mass media
in good or bad way- a
why it depends on a lot of things in your life- why there are many factors that could...
Closed Thread

Bookmarks

Tags
correction, article


Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are Off
Pingbacks are Off
Refbacks are Off


Similar Threads
Thread Thread Starter Forum Replies Last Post
the definite article + Proper Nouns ewelina Ask a Teacher 4 23-Jan-2008 15:36
response to an article Archie Ask a Teacher 2 25-Oct-2005 12:09
[Proofread please] Analysis of a magazine article johan_vm Editing & Writing Topics 3 08-Jun-2005 04:29
the usage of the definite article "the" critic72 Ask a Teacher 1 25-Apr-2005 18:34
new article navi tasan Ask a Teacher 14 30-May-2004 18:25


All times are GMT. The time now is 05:53.



Content Relevant URLs by vBSEO ©2011, Crawlability, Inc.