I've made a few corrections in red. I must admit I was rather surprised at the end by the sudden introduction of the government into the story!This is the first part of my short story A Couple. Please, would you correct my grammatical mistakes.
They came out of the woods into a meadow, holding hands - Adam and Eve of the 21st century. They were beautiful and exuded freshness and success. They were in their late twenties and had ambitious plans for the future. The meadow was
bathingbathed in the bright spring sun, giving the couple an aureoleaura/halo of dreamlike beauty. She was wearing a short, white dress, which accentuated her female body. Her well-shaped legs, and feet in white walking shoes moved smoothly through the wild, uncut grass. Her long, wavy, blond hair stirred in the breeze. He was a head taller than she was, dressed in a cream linen shirt and shorts of the same colour. His hairy(just not an attractive word or image) suntanned legs ended in black walking shoes.
The meadow was filled with blooming wild flowers. Above them the insects were buzzing, humming and flying from one flower to another. The woman squatted down many a time, picked daisies, dandelions, poppies, cowslips and yarrows and gathered them into a bouquet. Occasionally she gave it to the man to hold
it, while she waded through the grass searching for more flowers. Somewhere in the distance a cow was mooingmooed, a dog barkingbarked, and a woodpecker hammeringhammered. This was the scene which every government in the world would like to show fortheir public. This was the moment when human beings feel united with the universe and do not yearn after God’s promised paradise, nowwhen they have created their own.
To be continued.
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