The first paragraph of my composition.
In the first place, under the high pressure of the society, it is normal that people engaging in working until the midnight day by day. For instance, my boyfriend, as an architecture designer, he always stays in the same postures in front of the computer for several hours without exercises. With the development of the electric facilities, people cannot work anymore leaving computers or the Internet. We all know that keeping the same pose and staring at the computer screen for a long time is harmful to our body, but few people pay attention to protect their eyes. This is the life style for millions of white collars who live in this city under a high pace.
I am improving my writing skill by writing some compositions and this is first paragraph of my article. I did not post the whole article because I think it is a little long. Any grammar errors or somewhere nonnative in the paragraph? Any of your suggestions will be helpful. :)