Re: How about these two paragraphs?
gauchi, are you submitting these paragraphs to your teacher for grading?
(You realize that your argument suggests that there is a major discrepancy in the difference in intelligence/talent in the sexes. If 100 people, 50 men and 40 women, were to apply for 60 places, do you really think that if 30 women and 30 men were selected, that there would be a great number of the 20 of one sex not selected who were more talented than all 30 of the other sex? Perhaps the final five or six places might be shuffled around - perhaps 3 or 4 men might get admitted in spite of the towering intellect of the women who would have otherwise placed ahead of them, but it's insulting to both men and woman to suggest that talent is not gender-neutral.)
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.