Forum newsfeeds
Forum Newsfeeds


Sites for Teachers

Sites for Teachers


Go Back   UsingEnglish.com ESL Forum > Learning English > Editing & Writing Topics

Reply
 
LinkBack Thread Tools Display Modes
  #1 (permalink)  
Old 23-Sep-2006, 18:49
Junior Member
 
Join Date: Sep 2005
Country: Czech republic
Posts: 43
Current Location: Olomouc
First Language: English
Member Type: Student or Learner
Thanks: 2
Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts
petr is on a distinguished road
Default Correction - help

I´d like to ask you for correction of this report. The task was to write report to marketing depatment and describe trade fair that I have visited recently and explain why it could good for our company to take part in it.

Thanks in advance

Trade fair in England

This report outlines a desription of a trade fair PC 2006 that I visited from 22nd to 25th July in London. It also gives practical suggestion for taking part in PC 2007 next year and explain how it could be benefited.

Decription of PC 2006
Firstly, PC 2006 is one of the biggest computer trade fair round the world. It took place in big sports hall in residential suburb of London. This year more than 200 000 visitors visited about 1000 stands and presentations of computer companies such as well-known ACER or Microsoft. Organisation of this great event was perfect and professional. Moreover, there were enough parking places, restaurants, pubs, toilets, bus and underground stops around this place so that it was easy to get there and spend ages by admiring exhibition of amazing computer inventions and technology.

Benefits for our company
Our company could participate in this important world-wide trade fair next year to present our products and notice what is demanded by public. It would be useful to recognize new trends and styles in computer business and gain new interesting source of inspiration. In addition, it could help to find new business contacts for establishing a long-lasting cooperation and improve our contemporary situation as well.
Reply With Quote
Sponsored Links
  #2 (permalink)  
Old 24-Sep-2006, 07:00
Editor, UsingEnglish.com
 
Join Date: Nov 2002
Country: UK
Posts: 25,454
Current Location: Phnom Penh
First Language: English
Member Type: English Teacher
Thanks: 6
Thanked 429 Times in 385 Posts
Tdol has disabled reputation
Default Re: Correction - help

trade fair PC 2006 - trade fair, PC 2006,
practical suggestion - if singular then use the indefinite article, if not, then use the plural
be benefited- be improved
one of the biggest computer trade fair- fairs
round the world- in
big sports hall in residential suburb- a...a
200 000- 200,000
Organisation- the
spend ages by admiring exhibition- spend ages admiring the exhibition

PS- Petr, what's your first language? Central European? You miss quite a few articles.
Reply With Quote
Reply

Bookmarks

Tags
correction, help

Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are On
Pingbacks are On
Refbacks are On

Similar Threads
Thread Thread Starter Forum Replies Last Post
grammar correction for GMAT exam drrohitbaslas Ask a Teacher 1 15-Jan-2007 03:41
Another correction Guest Ask a Teacher 1 03-Apr-2006 03:15
Article correction - please help petr Ask a Teacher 1 22-Mar-2006 05:17
correction or corrections michaelfung Ask a Teacher 1 24-Sep-2005 10:29
On Spelling Correction and the Collective Knowledge of Web Users Red5 Text Analysis and Statistics 3 13-May-2005 14:55


New To Site? Need Help?

All times are GMT. The time now is 03:41.


vBulletin, Copyright ©2000 - 2008, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Search Engine Optimization by vBSEO 3.2.0
Copyright © 2002 - 2008 UsingEnglish.com