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Topic: Some people think that the use of computers should be restricted to reduce its harmful effect on children. Do you agree or disagree? Write a composition of 200 words giving your opinion on the topic.
Answer:To me, the use of computers should be restricted to reduce its harmful effect on children.Firstly, computers can make children neglect their study. Children can spend so many hours on computer games that they have no time for their study. Or even when they are in class, they may not pay attention to the lesson but think about games, for example, how to kill the boss or how to up level.Secondly, using a computer much surely does harm to children’s health. Like televisions, computers have nothing to protect the eye. If children look at them for too long, their eyes are harmed. Moreover, children’s muscles are weakened when they sit still to use a computer. Being absorbed in computers, they also often stay up late, which affects their growth.Finally, computers may affect children’s characters. For instance, being asked to study while playing his favorite game, a child may be willing to lie that he has done his homework to continue playing. Furthermore, if accessed to the Internet, a computer can happen to bring to children bad images such as sex and violence. And then children may have wrong thoughts about them.In conclusion, restricting the use of computers is necessary for children. However, children still should be allowed to use them because computers have their own advantages. (220 words)