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College graduate to sell out his talent in $1.2 million

Yesterday, a college student, Mr. Xiong, who has graduated for 2 years stood in front of the door of the Chinese Military Museum, pricing his talent $1.2 million for life. He said:"I want to sell out myself in this way to get a job that is more suitable for me."

Mr.Xiong told reporter that in 2002 he graduated from Huabei Institute of Technology, and his major was industrial automatization. After graduated, he has tried several jobs which were not much concerned with his speciality that he learned in college. For now, he is a physics teacher in a private school.

"I want to find a suitable job a bit sooner, and to realize my value." Mr.Xiong said that he has tried to go to employment markets and fairs but he failed. Because in the markets or fairs he could only talk with employees, not bosses, face to face.

Thus, he chose the way in pricing $1.2 million to "sell out" his talent.

"I offer the price after careful consideration," said Mr.Xiong.He felt that he can be at his best if he gets the opportunity, and he will realize the value well.'

"There are already more than 20 CEOs from different companies who have
given their business cards to me."

Mr.Xiong said that in this way he deemed he will get a job in least time.

Ms.Lee, who was passing by, said "The concept is questionable if you think you can be a white collar when you just graduated from college."

Chen Fangping, drector of the academic commission of the Central Education Science Research Institute of China, said that at present some college students should change their concept of employment. Your expectation for future job cannot be too high, or else you would be affected in future employment. As a matter of fact, begining your work in the grass roots is most practical.
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I made a few changes. Please read below. :D

College graduate selling his talents for $1.2 million

Yesterday, Mr Xiong, a college graduate, stood in front of the doors of the Chinese Military Museum, selling his talents for a life-time wage of $1.2 million. He said: "I want to sell myself in this way to get a job that is more suitable for me."

Mr. Xiong told reporters he graduated from Huabei Institute of Technology in 2002, with a major in industrial automatization. After graduating, he tried several jobs unrelated to his major, and at the time being, he is a physics teacher in a private school.

"I want to find a suitable job, and realize my potential." Mr. Xiong said that he has tried going to employment markets and job fairs but was unable to find suitable employment because employees, and not the management, with whom he would rather speak face-to-face, represent the companies at those markets and fairs.

Thus, he chose to sell his talents for $1.2 million.

"I offer that price after careful consideration," said Mr.Xiong. He feels he could realize his potential if he gets the opportunity.

"There are already more than 20 CEOs from different companies who have given their business cards to me."

Mr. Xiong said that in this way he deemed he will get a job in no time at all.

Ms. Lee, who was passing by, said "The concept is questionable if you think you can be a white collar when you've just graduated from college."

Chen Fangping, director of the academic commission of the Central Education Science Research Institute of China, said that at present college students thinking along the same lines as Mr Xiong should change their concept of employment. Their expectations for future jobs shouldn't be too high, or else they will be facing the same problems as Mr Xiong in trying to find a job in which they can realize their full potential. In reality, however, working your way up the ladder is more practical.
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Cool!

Your sharp eyes have penetrated what I thought in the article and then made all expressions as clear as crystal. :D

PS. At the time beng? personally, I think "for the time being" is used more frequently.
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Cool!

Your sharp eyes have penetrated what I thought in the article and then made all expressions as clear as crystle. :D

PS. At the time beng? personally, I think "for the time being" is used more frequently.
You're welcome. :D

You're right. In that context, For the time being sounds a lot better. :D
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