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[ghost87]

Evaluation Plan
Introduction
Blue and Orange Engineers will use many different data- driven processes to prove the projects
validity and successfulness. For instance, surveys will be sent to the drivers to check if they felt
any difference in the functionality of the cars or trucks. These surveys will serve as a source for
qualitative analysis. Also, since we will be converting only 10 cars and 10 trucks the remaining
will be used as a control group. This method will be of great help because we can monitor
expenditures from both groups. Financial statements will be compared.

Surveys
These surveys will be distributed to the cars and trucks drivers every three month to monitor if
they have experienced any difference in performance between driving vehicles that run on
compressed natural gas to those that run on gasoline, ethanol, and diesel fuels. This qualitative
data will be useful to determine their satisfaction.

Financial Statements
Once the project has run for a full year both financial statements will be compared to see if there
was a difference in expenses. Considering that gasoline and natural gas prices are always
fluctuating these statements will reassure savings to the University that can be used for
something else.

Conclusion
Aside from the intangible question of savings and benefits to the environment, a very close
inspection of the proposed plan will show that it will work if the recommended change is done.

[BECKSTOCK]

Hi my dear I'm a proofreader, not a teacher, but I hope this is useful to you:

'data - driven', not 'data- driven' 'projects' should be 'project's'. 'Cars and trucks drivers' should be 'car and truck drivers', it should be 'every three months', there should be a comma after 'year' in the 3rd paragraph, and another after 'fluctuating'.

I also would say, that 'reassure the savings to the University', does not seem to make sense to me, but I could be wrong.

Becks

[ghost87]

BECKSTOCK,

Thanks a lot for your help. What I was trying to say with that is that by comparing the financial statements from both group the university could clearly see that there will be savings from the experimental group.

How can I rewrite it so it will make sense?