text analysis

thanx once again:)
4 questions please...

1.what kind of activities in your opinion would aid the writer of the text above?

2. do you thiink the conclusion is apt for the text? i find it abrupt and dont really understad what the writer is trying to convey in that last para...

3.what is meant by 'staging of text (schematic structure)'?

4.How does one stage the text using SFL?

[Tdol]

1 Have you seen 'A book on writing'? (http://www.usingenglish.com/amazon/us/0951958216.html) That has lots of exercises to help with connection, etc.
2 No, it's abrupt, doesn't summarise and is of dubious relevance
3 You'll find an example here: http://iteslj.org/Techniques/Yang-Writing.html It's basically how it moves from paragraph to pragraph, point to point

Hi all ur advice and help is appriciated and thanks a million for the same.
just to more quries regarding the text:
1. Staging of text (schematic structure)- could you guide me through it please.
2. What are the nominals in this text?
thanks
:)

[Tdol]

Nominals are nouns, noun phrases, pronouns- anything that can function as a noun

Thanks for your help:)
1.Is it possible fo you to give me an example of Nominal groups from the text, i am a bit confused.

2.Also what does it mean when someone says 'nominal groups have pre and post modification'?

3.parataxis?

4.In the text would it be right to say there is no preview?

thanx

[Tdol]

By nominal groups, I assume the mean noun hrases, which would include all the words associated with the noun, etc, so 'many people' forms a group, with the noun and the modifier.
Parataxis is stringing language together without the use of conjunctions, which means that the language appears a bit disorganised and lacks perspective:
I went home- I was tired.
I went home because I was tired.
In this example, the first is clear enough, but if we keep dropping the connecting and coordinating terms, then the text becomes 'bitty'.

[Tdol]

By nominal groups, I assume the mean noun hrases, which would include all the words associated with the noun, etc, so 'many people' forms a group, with the noun and the modifier.
Parataxis is stringing language together without the use of conjunctions, which means that the language appears a bit disorganised and lacks perspective:
I went home- I was tired.
I went home because I was tired.
In this example, the first is clear enough, but if we keep dropping the connecting and coordinating terms, then the text becomes 'bitty'.

[Frizzy]

Hi,
Just some thoughts on this text.
Genre: exposition but relatively unelaborated.

Field: Participants simple nominal groups. Imprecise "they"

Tenor: Use of 1st person voice " I" makes writer appear less assertive. Informal language - use of contractions "It's a fact.." Modality "can" overused.

Mode: Structural organisation and grammatical cohesion insufficient. Low lexical density.

What do you think

Originally Posted by Frizzy

Hi,
Just some thoughts on this text.
Genre: exposition but relatively unelaborated.
Field: Participants simple nominal groups. Imprecise "they"
Tenor: Use of 1st person voice " I" makes writer appear less assertive. Informal language - use of contractions "It's a fact.." Modality "can" overused.
Mode: Structural organisation and grammatical cohesion insufficient. Low lexical density.
What do you think

Hey frizzy
thanks for your input do appriciate it.
If you were a ESL teacher what in your opinion would be the main problems to be addressed in this text?:
thanks

tdol:)
thanks
can i be right in cosidering the gere exposition (persuasive as the writer is quite forward in pushing his view by writing 'i think...' and eds the text with 'therfore using a bicycle....'

what would be the preview of this text?
thanks