[Cover Letter] Please, please!!! Check my cover letter!!!

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[FONT=&quot]Hello, I am applying for research technician position and I would like to ask for check my grammar mistake. I would really appreciate it! Thanks!!!!



Dear Recruitment Team[/FONT][FONT=&quot][/FONT]
[FONT=&quot] [/FONT] [FONT=&quot] I am writing in response to the advertisement on ....... website for the Research Technician position. [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot] I graduated in Biology from the Jagiellonian University, with specialization in Cell Biology. During my studies I gained knowledge of cancer biology, immunology and statistics. I have taken several laboratory courses, where I have been working with PCR, cell cultures, fluorescence and electron microscopy. Moreover, I am competent with gel electrophoresis, lectin blotting, chromatography and spectrophotometry, which I have used for my master's thesis research. Currently I broaden my knowledge at the postgraduate studies –Molecular biology.[/FONT] [FONT=&quot] The research area that interests me the most is cancer biology. I have a passion for working in laboratory. I would like to take part in research and be a part of the team and support[/FONT][FONT=&quot] developing and validating a novel form of gamma delta T-cell immunotherapy for ovarian cancer and also provide technical support for clinical trial of cell therapy.[/FONT] [FONT=&quot] I am a self disciplined person with good organizational skills and ability to work in group or independently. I easily learn new things and I am open to new challenges.[/FONT][FONT=&quot][/FONT] [FONT=&quot] I am interested in working for King’s College London because of its strong reputation as
a university and research institution. I believe that I have the capability and potential to take this Research Technician position. I would like to have the opportunity for a technical career in Translational Medicine to gain experience of research in the environment of a leading Clinical Research Organisation.[/FONT] [FONT=&quot] I look forward to hearing from you and having the opportunity to further discuss my qualifications.[/FONT] [FONT=&quot] [/FONT] [FONT=&quot]Thank you for your time and consideration.[/FONT]
 

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Hello, I am applying for a research technician position and I would like to ask [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] you to check my grammar. [STRIKE]mistake[/STRIKE] I would really appreciate it! Thanks![STRIKE]!!!
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Dear Recruitment Team (it would be better if you could find out the name of the person dealing with the applications)

I am writing in response to the advertisement on ....... website for the Research Technician position.

I graduated in Biology from [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] Jagiellonian University, [STRIKE]with specialization[/STRIKE] specialising in Cell Biology. During my studies I gained knowledge of cancer biology, immunology and statistics. I have taken several laboratory courses, [STRIKE]where[/STRIKE] during which I have [STRIKE]been working[/STRIKE] worked with PCR, cell cultures, fluorescence and electron microscopy. Moreover, I am competent with gel electrophoresis, lectin blotting, chromatography and spectrophotometry, which (all of which, some of which or just one of which) I [STRIKE]have[/STRIKE] used for my master's thesis research. Currently I am broadening my knowledge [STRIKE]at the[/STRIKE] by doing postgraduate studies in Molecular Biology. The research area that interests me the most is cancer biology. I have a passion for working in the laboratory. I would like to take part in research and be a part of the team and support developing and validating a novel form of gamma delta T-cell immunotherapy for ovarian cancer and also provide technical support for clinical trial of cell therapy. (The sentence I have underlined needs a complete rewrite as it's very confusing - too long apart from anything else.)

I am a self-disciplined person with good organizational skills and the ability to work in a group or independently. I learn quickly [STRIKE]easily learn new things[/STRIKE] and I am open to new challenges. I am interested in working for King’s College, London because of its strong reputation as
a university and research institution.

I believe that I have the capability and potential to undertake this Research Technician position. I [STRIKE]would like to have[/STRIKE] relish the opportunity [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] to develop a technical career in Translational Medicine to gain experience of research in the environment of a leading Clinical Research Organisation.

I look forward to hearing from you and having the opportunity to further discuss my qualifications. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Please see my amendments and suggestions in red above. I think the paragraphs need to be re-ordered but I only have time to deal with the grammar at the moment.
 

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Thanks a lot for your comments and especially your time !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:-D
 
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