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chowbarry

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Please help me improve the following sentences!

The FA, after careful consideration, has decided to drastically reduce the bookings of our playground pitches, since September 2012. Their relatively surprisingly decision has caused a sharp drop in the usage rate of our playground pitches thereafter.

Reasons for the FA reduce the bookings of our playground pitches:

The newly-appointed coach of ABC football team, which have used our pitches for training for years, repeatedly criticized the surface of our pitches uneven and frequently water-logged, which easily caused their players injury.

Our playground, in the eyes of ABC football team, has never been accessible, which brings lots of inconvenience to them for training and increases their costs on traveling.

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Please help me improve the following sentences!

The FA, after careful consideration,[STRIKE] has [/STRIKE]decided to drastically reduce the bookings of our playground pitches[STRIKE] ,[/STRIKE] since September 2012. Since then, their relatively surprising[STRIKE]ly[/STRIKE] decision has caused a sharp drop in the usage rate of our playground pitches [STRIKE]thereafter[/STRIKE].

Reasons for the FA [STRIKE]reduce the [/STRIKE] reduction of bookings of our playground pitches:

The newly-appointed coach of the ABC football team, which[STRIKE] have [/STRIKE] has used our pitches for training for years, repeatedly criticized the surface of our pitches as uneven and frequently water-logged, which easily caused their players injury.

Our playground, in the eyes of the ABC football team, has never been [STRIKE]accessible[/STRIKE] useable, which [STRIKE]brings [/STRIKE] causes [STRIKE]lots[/STRIKE] a lot of inconvenience to them for training and increases their costs [STRIKE]on traveling[/STRIKE] for travel.

Thank you very much!

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chowbarry

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billmcd, thank you very much!
 
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