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lavinia94

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Some people believe that only pupils of similar interests should be given admissions in schools. Others are of the opinions that schools should be open to all children with varied interests. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views. Give your opinion in not less than 250 words.

The notion that children are our future is universal. The prosperity of the next generation is the reason why so many people insist on improving the current educational system. This topic becomes an issue when society has to decide what is the best way to make this happen.

Many agree that children with the same interests should attend the same school. This will give them the opportunity to study what they like and are good at. Furthermore, being surrounded by pupils with the same academic strengths gives room for a lot of friendly competition and therefore improvement.

The downside of this type of educational system is that children would be exposed to only a few subjects. For instance, a highly artistic child that studies at an art school would be deprived of exploring more diverse areas of study such as mathematics, science or history that they may find appealing too.

On the other hand, there is also a significant percent of children that are not interested in only one area of study. Their passions vary during their childhood and teen years, so forcing them to choose between different subjects that fascinate them would not always be in their best interest. Being able to delve into a greater diversity of subjects would give them the chance to figure out what they are passionate about.

In conclusion, schools should guarantee that pupils will be studying subjects they enjoy and that they gain the necessary skills and knowledge to pursue a career in that are in the future. People are different, so there should be both specialized schools and schools with a more diverse timetable available to children depending on their learning rate and interests.
 

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Some people believe that only pupils of similar interests should be given admissions in schools. Others are of the opinions that schools should be open to all children with varied interests. How far do you agree or disagree with the above views. Give your opinion in not less than 250 words.

The notion that children are our future is universal. The prosperity of the next generation is the reason why so many people insist on improving the current educational system. This topic becomes an issue when society has to decide what is the best way to make this happen.

Many agree that children with the same interests should attend the same school. This will give them the opportunity to study what they like and are good at. Furthermore, being surrounded by pupils with the same academic strengths gives room for a lot of friendly competition and, therefore, improvement.

The downside of this type of educational system is that children would be exposed to only a few subjects. For instance, a highly artistic child [STRIKE]that [/STRIKE] who studies at an art school would be deprived of exploring more diverse areas of study such as mathematics, science or history that they may find appealing too.

On the other hand, there is also a significant percent of children that are not interested in only one area of study. Their passions vary during their childhood and teen years, so forcing them to choose between different subjects that fascinate them would not always be in their best interest. Being able to delve into a greater diversity of subjects would give them the chance to figure out what they are passionate about.

In conclusion, schools should guarantee that pupils will be studying subjects they enjoy and that they gain the necessary skills and knowledge to pursue a career in that are in the future. People are different, so there should be both specialized schools and schools with [STRIKE]a [/STRIKE]more diverse [STRIKE]timetable [/STRIKE] classes available to children depending on their learning rate and interests.
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